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~Flow
01-28-2009, 12:31 AM
I had a snow day today n wasnt allowed to drive anywhere, so i decided to find a beat and record a track. this is what i came up with

the hook was kinda just thrown on there, i could think of much to go over those LALALA's lol

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7282629

now let me tell you a story, a kid whos name was achmed
when he got on the plane, they simply called him bomb threat
he never caused it, god did, when he gave him the skin
n facial fetures of an arabian kid
hes cursed, in the most litteral terms
i cant imagine the pain but i figure it hurts
hes leaving a country, sayin god thats funny
my people fight to get "even", in an "odd ass country"
dark humor a heart fumer a flame
the human exclusion is beautiful today
his light, at the end of the tunnel i understand
is a bomb in hell according to my uncle sam
but sams always been racist, hes never been alright
first its black, than its brown, f*** tommorow it is white
but we countriest, "you an american? f*** you!"
we started with racism its to late to un-do

today in the u s of a
do us a fav-or, put those feelings away

now let me tell you a story a kid whose name was francious
isnted of calling him a bi*** people gave him tampons
is he from france? nah hes livin in amaerica
no accent no sh*** thats givin in his heritage
hes american born n raised in way
that few say is barable, terrible
hes thougher than a rock but rocks are chucked at him
cause hes comin from the spot thats not for tough campin
let me tell you a story. what? let me tell you a story
he got hit so much he thought he fell in a quarry
rocks are the bullets n they got their guns ringing
but he wont throw back because his upbringing
you gotta stop n think was it worth it?
some people call him bi*** i call him cougage
X2

Pen.
01-28-2009, 03:37 AM
7282629

You know theres embed codes if im on the site ;)

Pen.
01-28-2009, 03:39 AM
Peepin'.....Beat is dope, you rip this off of youtube? lol...shoulda took the lboogz tag off...Beat is dope as fuck though, just needs to be higher quality....Verse comes in..Delivery is gettin a lil better, but you still sound like you have way too much spit in your mouth...Hook has potential...flow was decent but a bit shaky at parts...ok track..keep dropping and elevating.

Rico
01-28-2009, 06:21 AM
I may be the only person to say is I do not like this beat, it's corny to me. You're riding the beat and your lyrics are cool but I do not like your voice/delivery. And the hook is super corny lol TODAY IN THE U S OF A!! Cool message though throughout the song...now ima let the track ride out.

JøëL..
01-29-2009, 09:47 PM
heard this on another site..the delivery was alright but you need to say your words more clearer..the beat was good of course nah meen..topic was on point..nice story telling..keep doing you and elevating man im liking it so far.

~Flow
01-30-2009, 12:08 AM
Peepin'.....Beat is dope, you rip this off of youtube? lol...shoulda took the lboogz tag off...Beat is dope as fuck though, just needs to be higher quality....Verse comes in..Delivery is gettin a lil better, but you still sound like you have way too much spit in your mouth...Hook has potential...flow was decent but a bit shaky at parts...ok track..keep dropping and elevating.

ha i kinda liked the tag, gave a nice little intro. and yeah i ripped it off youtube. your the only one to catch that so far lol

i would say sounding like i have spit in my mouth is a step up from what was it... sounding like i have downsyndrom? lol

anyways thanks for the feed pen, its always preciated

I may be the only person to say is I do not like this beat, it's corny to me. You're riding the beat and your lyrics are cool but I do not like your voice/delivery. And the hook is super corny lol TODAY IN THE U S OF A!! Cool message though throughout the song...now ima let the track ride out.

thanks man the feeds preciated, and yeah the hook was kinda of thrown together quick

heard this on another site..the delivery was alright but you need to say your words more clearer..the beat was good of course nah meen..topic was on point..nice story telling..keep doing you and elevating man im liking it so far.

ha thanks man, and yeah i sometimes end up mumbling. its hard to catch myself on it cause i can understand shit everytime. just not everyone can lol

anyways its preciated

NEK
02-01-2009, 07:57 PM
COUGH COUGH!!!!! need some improvements... ya production is blahhh..
beat is blaaaahhhh...
I aint feeling the voice that much !

NEK
02-01-2009, 07:58 PM
lmao.. im listening again .. som funny shit in here though ill give you that .. it could be good actually .. but the beat is WACK